20 October 2009 @ 03:16 pm
[fic] Deep; Chapter Eleven  
Title: Deep (11/?)
Authors: [livejournal.com profile] omen1x2 and [livejournal.com profile] sakura121
Rating: R
Fandom: DBSK/TVXQ, Super Junior cameos
Pairing: JaeChun, HoSu, MinSu (more later)
Disclaimer: The settingโ€™s mine. The characters arenโ€™t.
Summary: Centuries in the future, humanity hasnโ€™t moved onto the stars as previously theorized. As the earth changes, everything is covered by ocean, and underwater cities become the means of survival.

Chapter One, Chapter Two, Chapter Three, Chapter Four, Chapter Five, Chapter Six, Chapter Seven, Chapter Eight, Chapter Nine, Chapter Ten






Deep
Chapter Eleven
Written by Omen-chan and Sakura-chan





"What's your name, boy?"

In this world, with this life, there are only two ways to exist. Of the two, resignation is by far the easiest.

The boy takes the other way. He responds by spitting his name out like a curse, his entire body tense, and growls like an animal ready to attack, or flee.

The old man just gives him a wry smile, the expression on his face impossible for the boy to read. He can't recognize kindness.




They finally stop running when they reach a store. They'd passed through room after dingy room, countless market stalls along the way, as well as places that could possibly pass for the flimsy walls of makeshift houses, the bare minimum necessary for some modicum of privacy. This is the first place in this indecipherable labyrinth of the slums that seems to actually be a business in its own right.

They don't have time to enjoy it.

Yoochun had barely slept for two hours when Jaejoong shook him awake. A tense whisper of, "We have to go," and a quick glance towards the nearest doorway all the response necessary to bring Yoochun fully alert. He hadn't even looked himself to see who was following them before the two of them burst out of their small hiding place, thus beginning another long chase through Psi Level.

But now Yoochun can't run anymore. He bends over, panting and hands gripping his knees. He's never felt so exhausted. When he finally gathers enough strength to look up, however, he sees his lover, eyes wide and black, and barely even breathing heavily.

He spares just a moment of wonder before a hand, heavy and cold, falls on the back of his neck.

Unthinking, he bursts into a whirling hurricane of motion.



They're almost to the store when Yunho says, unexpectedly serious, "I hope we don't run into Heechul."

He receives strange glances from his companions, one curious, the other unreadable, but before they can ask him anything, they're interrupted.

They see Tok running out the door of his store, loud crashes and yells clearly audible from behind him.

The entire market seems to stop. Everyone knows that Tok's store, as Psi Level's only real one, is a kind of haven where unspoken truces held. Fights may break out anywhere else and with little provocation, but not at Tok's.

There was a time when Yunho, like so many other low levelers, would have looked away. Instead, he grabs Tok's arm before he can rush past.

The poor, fat man doesn't even wait to be questioned; the information just spills from his mouth unbidden. "Hwa-Su's in there killing two kids from the Uppers!"

Yunho's aghast. The Uppers?! Why would anyone from the Uppers, let alone two kids, come to Psi Level? He turns to say something along these lines to Junsu and Changmin, but they're already gone. He's only able to catch a quick glimpse of them as they run into the store.

"Shit," he mutters, and follows them.



It's a massacre inside, which Yunho expected; Hwa-Su's down and possibly dead, which he did not.

The two Upper kids, quite possibly the cause of all this mayhem, are easy to spot. One with short hair and a large, gaping gash on his forehead is on the floor, eyes closed and his breathing shallow. The other one crouches over him with the look of a small, feral animal protecting its young from a larger enemy. He's snarling ferociously at Changmin, and it's only when Changmin responds that Yunho realizes the snarls are actually words.

"I'm not going to hurt him," Changmin is saying in a calm, matter-of-fact voice. Yunho briefly wonders if he had been taught this at the academy, or if the young medic had been able to read that sympathy and soothing words would have no effect.

"You're not going to fucking touch him," the Upper growls viciously. "I'll break your fucking wrists if you try."

Changmin continues as if the Upper hadn't spoken. "I'm a medic. See?" He pulls out his ID and shows it to him, careful to keep his movements slow and unthreatening. "I just want to help. Honest."

If anything, this makes the Upper even more suspicious. "Why?"

Changmin glances towards where Junsu is checking Hwa-Su's vital signs, and then says simply, the words loaded with hidden meaning, "Because I want to."

Yunho's just beginning to doubt whether that's going to do any good when the injured Upper kid twitches and gives a noise somewhere between a whimper and a groan.

The change this makes over the strange, feral boy is breathtaking and instantaneous. He looks away from Changmin and down at his charge, expression suddenly human with heartbreak. "Okay," he whispers.



It takes all of Jaejoong's willpower not to strike as the young medic reaches towards Yoochun's prone figure. He's helping, he reminds himself, and focuses instead on Yoochun's breathing. Inhale-exhale-inhale-exhale. Too fast, and Jaejoong isn't sure if the young boy with too-old eyes will even be able to help.

There are two others. One leaves the downed enemy's side and walks back to the entrance to hold a whispered conversation with the taller one. Jaejoong catches each movement with the eyes of a veteran soldier, or a hunted animal.

When they approach, Jaejoong tenses all over again, but they stop before they can get too close. The shorter one kneels down and smiles at him encouragingly, but speaks to the medic. "How's it going, Changmin?" Jaejoong focuses again on Yoochun, following each breath desperately.

"He's alive, but he has a pretty bad concussion. And I can't tell yet if there are any internal injuries, so we should probably take him back to the ship."

"Well, if we do, we should probably do it soon," the other replies, unwontedly cheerful. "Hwa-Su's not dead."

The medic - Changmin - curses, and Jaejoong isn't sure if it's because he has too much to deal with as it is without having to worry about another injured person, or if he's upset at the man's "not dead" status.

The two of them, conversation apparently finished, then turn to look at the third one. It's only then that Jaejoong realizes they have no authority to bring anyone aboard this "ship," and that this one must therefore be their leader.

The third one finally speaks. "Very well. Let's go get them patched up." A pause, and then he continues wryly, "At least we didn't run into Heechul."



The old man, instead of touching him or taking him to some dark place, just makes him hold his bag as they wander the labyrinth of Omega Level. Eventually, he leads the boy onto one of the Lifts, which had been previously forbidden to him.

"I don't suppose you've got an ID card, have you?"

The boy shakes his head, his suspicions keeping him mute.

"Well, we'll get you one tomorrow."

As the Lift rises, the boy gazes out at the ocean through the misty plexi-glass. It's the first time he's seen it; Omega Level has no glass, only walls. There's a squid hanging onto the Lift from the outside, and Yunho pokes the bottom of his foot against it. He can't seem to take his eyes off it.

"Where are you taking me?" He hasn't spoken since he'd told the stranger his name all those hours ago.

The old man just smiles. "To my ship, the Rising Sun. Welcome to your new life as my first mate, Yunho."





~to be continued...~




... Previous Chapter / Next Chapter...




A/N: When my computer died, all the notes I had about Deep died too, tragically. I promise to keep working on it to the best of my ability, and I hope to continue it as I planned, but without those notes, a lot of things are probably going to end up changing. *sighs* For the better, I at least hope.
 
 
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[identity profile] renichifreak.livejournal.com on October 20th, 2009 08:54 pm (UTC)
I love this story so much~!!!!!!!!

Yay for updates!!!!

Try not to overstress yourself, okay??
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 20th, 2009 10:21 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I'm sorry it took so long to get this chapter out. I'll try harder next time. ^^
[identity profile] renichifreak.livejournal.com on October 20th, 2009 10:22 pm (UTC)
don't worry about it!! I'm a very slow updater myself, so...

XDDD

I know about computers dying, so yeah...

Edited 2009-10-20 10:23 pm (UTC)
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 01:24 am (UTC)
lol
Well, as long as no one's upset with me, I guess it's all right. ^^;;

Ugh, yeah. Dead computers can just ruin your whole life.
[identity profile] aodaili-m.livejournal.com on October 20th, 2009 08:55 pm (UTC)
YOU UPDATED!!!

Came across this fic awhile ago and thought you'd dropped it. I very much enjoy this story, and you seem to be one of the few authors who does a lot of JaeChun, which I dearly wish this fandom had more of. Good luck and best wishes for continuing this fic...computer issues are such a drag, serious sympathy there.
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 20th, 2009 10:22 pm (UTC)
No, not dropped, just distracted by other things, I'm afraid. ^^;;;;

I promise I'll try to get the next chapter out quicker. It's just going to be harder, since all my files on it are gone now.
[identity profile] michellembam.livejournal.com on October 20th, 2009 10:03 pm (UTC)
:o
how I have missed thee, Deep~ :D

ah man, XD it's getting real good.
oh dude, that sucks so much about your computer. Sorry :S
Well, I'm pretty sure I'd still love this fic even if things changed :DDDD

HWAITING~ <3
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 20th, 2009 10:24 pm (UTC)
Yeah, I'm glad TVXQ have FINALLY all gotten together. I feel bad that it's been so long since I updated. v____v

I'll work harder!
[identity profile] michellembam.livejournal.com on October 20th, 2009 10:51 pm (UTC)
No worries, dear~
I patiently waited and I will patiently wait some more if need be :D
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 20th, 2009 10:53 pm (UTC)
Ah, that's so sweet, thank you. I'm glad you didn't get tired of waiting for it. ^^
[identity profile] michellembam.livejournal.com on October 20th, 2009 10:59 pm (UTC)
lol I kept checking for updates and when I saw none I just re-read it from the beginning :D heee~
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 01:17 am (UTC)
Duuuuuuuuuuuurrrrr, that's even sweeter. Gawrsh. *blushes* ♥
Plague: Changmin- \o/[personal profile] corellianrogue on October 20th, 2009 11:37 pm (UTC)
I literally squeaked with joy when I saw this on my flist.

Yay, they finally all meet! Wherever you end up taking this story, I'm sure it'll be amazing and awesome.
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 01:19 am (UTC)
I think I kinda hoped I'd end up getting a reaction like that, only I didn't think I'd get one. XD

Awww, thank you! I'm kind of worried about it, myself, but it means a lot that you've got faith in me, I guess. ^^
Plague: DBSK- wonder twins[personal profile] corellianrogue on October 21st, 2009 02:07 am (UTC)
That's generally my reaction whenever I see this fic updated. I probably should have mentioned it sooner, considering how long I've been following it, but... eh... okay, so I have no excuse for my horrible lurkerness, but I shall try to do better?

Well, sure you're worried. You're the author. If you weren't a little bit worried, it would probably mean you didn't care. I, however, am not in the least worried, because I've read your other fics. ^_^ Just don't stress yourself out. We can wait. It would be very sad if you ended up hating this thing because of the headache it gave you.
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 02:14 am (UTC)
(Your icon is so cute and squishy. ♥)

You are so amazingly sweeeeeeeet... Duuuurrr. *blushes* And believe me, it's more than enough that you comment at all, and you've always been very good about that. How else am I going to know if someone likes my fics or not? ^o^

A very excellent point, darling. And, ugh, I'd hate it if I ever got to the point where I'd get annoyed at anything I wrote. My fics are like my children. Only without the pain of pregnancy, and rather too many of them to be healthy. XD
Plague: DBSK- YooSu[personal profile] corellianrogue on October 21st, 2009 02:18 am (UTC)
(I have many cute and squishy icons~)

*laughs* From what writing I've done, I'd have to say that 'without the pain of pregnancy' definitely isn't always the case. XD Sometimes the dang things just refuse to be born written.
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 03:31 am (UTC)
(I suppose it helps that the boys themselves are so cute and squishy. ♥)

But hopefully it doesn't take them nine months? Because, ugh, that would be horrific.
[identity profile] pinaypanda.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 12:05 am (UTC)
oh yay update!! =D
i love this story ^^ The world is so interesting

[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 01:20 am (UTC)
Thank you! ^o^
[identity profile] vanilla-klise.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 05:16 am (UTC)
Ohhh, I am sorry for your notes. But I'm also so happy to see an update to this! It really made my night.

Especially finding out that JaeChun's part and HoSuMin's were happening concurrently! (For some reason I thought the former was in the past, so this was a neato surprise.) I might have said this on one of the previous chapters, but I absolutely love the world you guys have set up, with it's cruel hierarchies and mores (and the squidies). And yay for Dr!Changmin.

It will be really interesting to see how the two parties of characters develop, now that they've met. Hang in there, I wish you the best!
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 02:46 pm (UTC)
Yeah, losing my computer majorly sucked, and my notes was the least of it. v_____v

I can kind of see where you would think so, actually. In fact, huh, that's a cool idea. I should do that sometime, after I finish this fic. I kinda like it. Oooo, maybe even whole decades between the seperate parts.... *brain goes off*

And I'm glad you love my Deep!verse. If I remember correctly (I mean, it's been kind of a while), I spent two or three weeks just discussing it with Sakura-chan before I ever even wrote a word. It's kinda sorta my baby. ♥
[identity profile] rangikucharlize.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 05:17 am (UTC)
How come I've never seen this fic???? I MUST be blind because this is a work of art
I'm really really excited to know whats going to happen next- I love the way it was skipping between stories <# just super amazing
Update soon!!!
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 02:47 pm (UTC)
"Work of art"? *blushes* Thank you, that's an amazing compliment. =^o^=

I'll do my best!
[identity profile] ekkusuchan.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 07:57 am (UTC)
wah!! an update!! ^___^ banzai!!! just yesterday i recalled at the back of my mind that there seem to be some memorable chaptered fics that i've not finished reading and was wondering what are they, and then you updated. i think i'm psychic xD
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 02:49 pm (UTC)
lol
Yaaaaay, psychic powers! That's awesomeness. I've been wanting to get this chapter up for months, but things kept happening, and then my computer died, and UGH. So yesterday I just sat down with a notebook and FORCED myself to just finish the thing, notes or no.

I think I write better without a computer.
[identity profile] ekkusuchan.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 03:25 pm (UTC)
ouch... sorry about your notes >_< but i'm sure any changes made between then and now is gonna be for the better =D
perhaps you can start sending your own story and notes to yourself, through emails, that way even though your computer crash, the data will still be in your mailbox ^^ (that's how my sister's been saving her school project files o.o)

perhaps you could write somewhere, and then scan the pages and post it up =DDD will be interesting ^^ (i write without computer too)
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 04:10 pm (UTC)
Maybe I will, once I get a computer again. As it is, I'm just writing everything down now.

And UGH, I wouldn't ever do that to a person. My handwriting is basically unintelligible to anyone that isn't me. >.>
[identity profile] ekkusuchan.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 07:52 pm (UTC)
LOL! those who can read it get the award then xD
[identity profile] ryther.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 02:35 pm (UTC)
I was just planning to re-read your fic from the beginning when I saw an update today *flails*

I'm so sorry about your computer. I had the same incident happening to me too and I still couldn't get all my finished and unfinished fic, short stories and idea notes back. Ganbatte!

I hope you know that I'm sooooooooooo!!!! happy that you've updated. And as everyone commented, we'll keep waiting for your updates...*throw confetti*
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on October 21st, 2009 02:52 pm (UTC)
Awww! I'm glad I got a new chapter up, so you have a new one to read, then. ^o^

Yeah, believe me, lack of computer SUCKS, and the lost works is just the least of it. Let's just say, I don't really have much to keep me from being bored when I don't have one.

*bounces* I'll try to get the next chapter up soon! Really really really! Hopefully! ^^;;;
๐”ธ๐•ƒ๐”ผโ„•๐”ธ: 6[personal profile] amihan on October 30th, 2009 08:01 am (UTC)
I'm delighted that you have not yet given up on this fic. Not even technical difficulties can stop you from writing. Keep it up!

Yunho's POV of Jaejoong and Yoochun is very interesting. His description of Jaejoong as a "small, feral animal". The background on him is just as interesting! Re-reading all your fics was a good idea! "Home" is still my most favorite, with "Velvet" as second. "Ladybugs and Zebras" is not included. It's beyond favorite XD

[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on November 17th, 2009 04:30 pm (UTC)
Nooooooo! I cannot give up on it. Technical difficulties don't make it impossible, just very, very difficult. XD

BTW, I've got a job now, so until I get my own comp, I won't be on much. I just don't have enough time in the day to deal with this thing's annoying crappiness.
๐”ธ๐•ƒ๐”ผโ„•๐”ธ: 36[personal profile] amihan on November 19th, 2009 01:07 am (UTC)
That's good news! And I mean your statement about not giving up on it. I do hope you get over the technical difficulties soon.

Congratulations on getting a job :D I knew you'd get one soon :)♥~
[identity profile] be-ddelusionall.livejournal.com on November 8th, 2009 08:17 am (UTC)
Okay, so it's 1:15 am and I just got finished reading all 11 chapters and OMG! I am so addicted to this fic, you have no idea. This is the coooooooooolest story ever, and i was just about to demand when when when things for Yoochun and Jaejoong got better, but they ran into MinSuHo; and OMG MinSuHo, when is Yunho going to admit about Junsu being sick, and OMG what is wrong with Junsu????

(love Heechul! he's my all time favorite and the thought of Junsu chasing him with a dead fish is hilarious!!!!)

Okay ... I do believe I can breathe now.

*waits for updates*
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on November 17th, 2009 04:32 pm (UTC)
lol
Thank you! The best compliment I can get is when people get so involved with my stories. It makes me uber-happy. ♥

Dude, writing the SuJu scenes are pretty much my favorite thing ever. I adore them. If I'm not careful, they're gonna end up taking over the fic.
[identity profile] mooglemarcher.livejournal.com on April 24th, 2010 11:19 pm (UTC)
You don't want to know how long I stayed up last night reading all of your DBSK stories in order, up to chapter 8 of Deep. \dead\ I'm hooked~

When I finished chapter 11, I was heartbroken because you hadn't updated in months. DDD: I love everything about your writing - your characterization, your plots, your DBSK and original universes... Really, I can't think of words to describe it.

I hope your lack of activity doesn't mean you've abandoned your writing. DDD: Please update when you have the chance! :)
[identity profile] omen1x2.livejournal.com on May 31st, 2010 04:41 pm (UTC)
Oh, but of course I want to know! It's always nice to know I'm not the only one that loses sleep due to fandom. XD

And don't worry, I haven't abandoned Deep; I just haven't had access to a computer in months (since before I upped my last chapter, actually). But now that I've got one again, I'm going to try working on a new chapter really soon. I promise. ^^
[identity profile] mooglemarcher.livejournal.com on June 3rd, 2010 10:35 pm (UTC)
The fact that you responded to me is so amazing. XD I'm glad I found another member of the Sleepless Nights for Fanfiction 'club'. :D

Ugh, going without a computer is the worst. D: I'm still waiting to repair mine, so I keep hijacking my sister's. It's great you have yours again! Though, the loss of your notes is awful. D: Still, I'm so excited about your upcoming chapter. :D Though Deep might change, I'm sure it can only be for the better.
[identity profile] akamedakenae.livejournal.com on June 3rd, 2010 06:30 am (UTC)
love it cant wait for more plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
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[identity profile] xsuju-addictx.livejournal.com on December 14th, 2010 01:11 pm (UTC)
OK OK OK
TVXQ REUNITE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
IN THIS CHAPTER!!!!

P/S: always keep the faith.
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